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She Lies
A victim of Death’s Refusal
Unwilling to submit her to rest
Curses her for her weakness
Until She learns her lesson

She cries,
hating life, beat by her father, cursed by her mother, raped by her boyfriend, she hides in her mind.  She lives in endless sorrow, she wants it to end.  She doesn’t want to cry anymore.  So she brings cold sharp steel to her wrist, drains the life giving blood, and then jumps into a pit of endless water, cold as corpses.  

She wakes,
up in a room but she can’t see, only hears, she hears her mother and farther crying for her.  She regrets what she has done and wishes to live once again, for just one more chance.  Death lets her wait, lets her learn, and lets her suffer.  Years later death decides to give her a chance, he tells her to never let hope die and to live.  With that she wakes from her coma.

She starts,
living happily, her family treats her well, her new boyfriend makes her happy.  Then after awhile things start to go downhill, things start becoming the same and she falls into depression, dealing once again with self struggle.  She ignores death warning; she lets the weakness consume her.  She decides that death is the only way and gets a gun.  With tears streaming down here face she sticks the tool of death deeply in her mouth, whispers a good bye and pulls the trigger…

She listens,
as Death tells her she has failed to heed his warning, wasted her chance.  Her punishment would be worse then life and worse then twisted death; he would show her true suffering.  She was to torment endlessly till the end of her days, stuck in a paralyzed body, but with a perfect mind, unable to ever sleep or take sanctuary in her mind.  Death would make her learn.

She lies
A victim of Death’s Refusal
Unwilling to submit her to rest
Cursing her for her weakness
Until she learns her lesson.
©2003-2009 ~snakeeyesx
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Author's Comments

um worte this the other day just randomly, was sitting around and thinking and this just came. Not sure if i even like it, but i was thinking about a few friends and what they have been going though so decieded to submit it any ways. As always C and C is welcome, please be blunt on this one...

The picture is of my friend Amelia, now go fuckin read!

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Very strong and powerful... and I love that structural concept. Shame about the little typos, in the first stanza I guess its 'submit' rather than 'summit' and in the first and last stanza 'Until' rather thatn 'in till' ?

But ignoring that its a most stunningly powerful work, and very impressive indeed my friend! :clap:

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hey, thanks a ton for the comment, and thanks for the corrections, fixed em all up, like my old teacher used to say " Wheres your grammer" and then he'd awenser for you and say "Shes in the kitchen baking cookies" lol ill never forget that...

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"for he is everything and nothing,
hero and fool,
potent, helpless-
and with one world of truth or treachery
he will save or damn the Earth
because he is mad and sane,
cold and passionate,
lost and found."

-The Unbeliever
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:giggle: Aww that little Wolfy. haha This is very powerful indeed. Sad how we're given a second chance and still have the same result. We never learn

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Death makes angels of us all
& gives us wings
where we had shoulders
smooth as raven's
claws
-Jim Morrison
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Intense... :o
One of the most strong things I've read in these days. :)

You did well in describing... very emotionally done...

Keep it up! I'd love to read more from ya. :w00t: :hug:

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So you say a second chance is like not worth it? You are correct for the most part but! Unless some drastic changed occurred and becomes a permanent means then there is hope! Also if they are young and a lot of room to grow that is also another case where a second chance is likely to work. Yet once we are set in our belittle ways and do not wish to change or only for a short period to gain what we want or think we have gained it, then it is likely the same event will take place again. – Just my thoughts take them as such -

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She lies
A victim of Death’s Refusal
Unwilling to submit her to rest
Cursing her for her weakness
Until she learns her lesson.

such a power filled piece

brought a tear to the eye

congrats

has been a long while since i cried

to long

thank you

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Walking the Boulevard or broken dreams, lost in a mer de noms

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